Weekend Writing Warriors 8-Sentence Sunday #9
I’m deep into rewrites/revision on The Music Is You, so I’m sticking with another snippet from Like Fine Wine this week. The revision work is hard, but satisfying when I reread what I’ve done and realize how far I’ve come in the past three years. My writing is maturing and I’m learning so much. In spite of how arduous it is to cut and cut and cut, and then rewrite and rewrite, I know that my stories are getting better with each pass, and that I’ll be proud to put them out there for everyone to read.
So, to set the scene: Last week, we saw Will and Julie post-kiss and Julie’s appalled to realize that Will has reawakened her libido. She’s racked with guilt because her attraction to Will feels like she’s betraying Charlie, even though he’s been dead a year. The other problem is Will is younger by 13 years, and she’s not at all interested in playing cougar, not when she’s almost a grandmother. After the kiss, Will announces that he’s attracted to her, but Julie is giving him all the reasons why their getting together is a terrible idea, and she’s just told him she’s way too old for him:
“Bullshit.” Will’s voice trembled. “I’m thirty-nine years old—in most cultures that’s considered an adult.”
“Well, I’m fifty-two and in this culture that’s considered practically a senior citizen.” My heart still pounded. My face was feverish and a trickle of sweat ran between my breasts.
Oh great, a hot flash.
I was mortified and frustrated…and longing to hurl myself back into his arms and kiss him stupid.
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karen Y. bynum
Great dialogue! Loved “kiss him stupid” Ahh!! Enjoyed your snippet! 😀
Thanks for coming by, Karen!
I absolutely ADORE her. More, please!
Vivien, so glad you dropped by! Thank you! I’m hoping my older heroines will be a refreshing change for romance readers…we need to remind the world that older women are dynamic and sexy and still having fun!
What a time for a hot flash. I love the older heroine, BTW. I can’t wait to read this.
Thanks so much, Linda! It’ll be out later this year!
Poor thing, what a time for a hot flash! Terrific snippet!
Happy you came by, Veronica! Yeah, been there…hot flashes suck and they seem to come at the most inopportune moments.
Lots of interesting stuff going on. The whole interaction does feel very real. Now I’m wondering if she’ll back off with all the emotion she must be feeling, or if she’ll pursue that attraction. Nice peek into the scene.
Thank you, Marcia. She’s a mass of mixed up, isn’t she? 😉
Ute Carbone (@Wildwords2)
I love the honesty in her feelings, how she wants him and pushes him away at the same time. Well done!
Merci, Ute! Thanks for coming by!
Loved it. Tweeted.
What an amazing female character! I love it! 🙂
Thanks, Ammy! So glad you came by!
Very nice. And believeable reactions. I’m enjoying the sexual tension here. : )
So glad you came by, Roben–thanks! Julie and Will were fun to write, especially Julie because I could relate to her on so many levels. 😉
Oh, gosh, that was too funny. I almost snorted pop onto my computer. a hot flash — love it.
Thanks, Shannyn! I’m in the stage of life where I can so identify!