Weekend Writing Warriors 8-Sentence Sunday
Here we go! More of Once More From the Top. Last week, Liam had just discovered that he has a son he never knew existed. He found Carrie on the beach and demanded the truth. She’s terrified and sick at heart, but tries to respond:
He’d started trembling. “It’s been fifteen years. You’ve hidden my son from me for fifteen years.”
“I was afraid.” Her response was barely audible above the sounds of the water lapping on the shore. Liam put one finger under her chin, forcing her to look at him.
“Afraid of what?” Tears shimmered in his eyes as she saw bewilderment win out over outrage for second.
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16 Comments
Linda Hamonou
I also want to know afraid of what because he still seems like a very sweet guy.
Nan
Hi Linda…stay tuned…
Stevie Carroll
A great excerpt for Fathers Day.
Nan
Thanks, Stevie!
Carol Duff
A mother’s decision not to tell a father always has many fears. I often wonder when social services demands the father’s name. And I have known grown children who don’t want to know their father. But here it appears that the father really cares, demonstrated by the tears in his eyes. It could have really made a difference for this child.
Nan
Thanks for coming by, Carol–it was an interesting topic to explore…
Anne Lange
Good hook. I know I want to know why. Very emotional too. Great snippet!
Nan
Thanks, Anne! So happy you came by.
J. Rose Allister
Yeah..afraid of WHAT??!! What’s her excuse? I have to know more! Look forward to next week.
Nan
Thanks, Rose–see you next week! 😉
Veronica Scott
Oh, how heartbreaking, but you do leave me wondering what she was so afraid of…excellent excerpt!
Nan
Thank you, Veronica! I’m glad you felt his pain. I needed him to be sympathetic, not a butt head!
Shannyn Schroeder
I think you should’ve cheated and given us the next line. Very cruel to make us wait for her response. Excellent tension and emotion.
Nan
Nope…no cheating, Shannyn! But I was tempted!!
Marcia
A super touching moment and so nicely written. This just leads readers right along. What a place to stop!
Nan
Thanks, Marcia! So glad you stopped by!