Weekend Writing Warriors 8-Sentence Sunday #3
I’m stepping away from Like Fine Wine for a week to give you a tiny taste of another book I’m doing revision work on, The Music Is You. I think I might go back and forth between them for a few weeks because LFW’s main character, Julianne Miles was a secondary character in Music, which is her best friend Carrie’s story. Carrie Halligan is a single mom, raising a teenaged son on the shores of Lake Michigan in a small town near Traverse City. Her world gets turned upside down when her son’s father, sexy symphony conductor Liam Reilly, suddenly appears on the scene after almost sixteen years. Carrie once believed she was going to be a concert pianist like her mother, but life took a different turn, but now, for fun, she plays requests at bar every other Saturday night. This snippet is is from the first scene:
Haydn’s Concerto in C Major.
She gazed at the paper, uncomprehending as her heart pounded in her ears, shutting out the chatter in the bar.
Dear God in heaven. Who requested this?
Her fingers shook and the words on the paper blurred. Only one person would ask her to play that particular piece, and there was no way on Earth he was in this bar. She closed her eyes, releasing a long, shuddering breath before glancing as casually as she could at the crowd.
Is he here? Is it possible?
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Oh yeah, he’s there! He is so totally there, and he’s going to screw with her world as she knows it…bring it on! : )
Hey, Roben–yup, he’s there and he is going to mess with her little corner of the universe…glad you stopped by, baby! I’m just starting Blue Dolphin and I’m already hooked!
Wow, AWESOME set up, so much tension already. I look forward to more!
Thanks, AJ! So glad you liked it–tension is a good thing when we’re setting up a reunion, so I’m glad you felt it.
Nan, we’re glad you’re part of 8sunday! And I’m glad you got courageous about comments. I came to thank you for some excellent feedback you left for me. 🙂
Hey, Teresa! You’re welcome! I hope I wasn’t too presumptuous…
I love the musical selection. If it is him, he must have done a lot of searching to find her. I sense that this is a different setting from her early experience. It must have meant a lot to him to find her. Right now, I feel it is him, for how many people would have the courage to select classical in a bar?
Hello, Carol! Thanks for stopping by! Actually, he wasn’t looking for her…not reallly… 😉
I’m betting he is there, which means it is possible. Another possibility: there’s a classical music fan in the bar. There has to be more than one Haydn enthusiast who likes his “Concerto in C Major.” Of course if it is Liam I “C Major” complications ahead. Bad musicians’ puns: they’re in my blood. 😉
Kate, hello! I love puns! Yes, I know they’re considered the lowest form of humor, but they take great creativity, so I’m a fan! Thanks for coming by!
Monica Enderle Pierce
It’s nice to see the bar setting used differently. This is unique and intriguing.
Thanks, Monica! When you’re bringing two people back together after 16 years, you gotta get creative, don’t you? So glad you stopped by!
I’m hooked, Nan. The “why did somebody come back” stories are always really interesting. And I love the names you give your charachters. Cheers!
So glad you stopped by, Jim! Yeah, I love reunions, too but they’re a tough plot, I think. However, Liam and Carrie have been in my head for so many years, it was time to let them out! Cheers back!
Love this, but of course you know that.
Liz! Thanks for coming by! I do know that, but it’s a very different opening now and I hope, better. Can’t wait to see you when you get back from FL and we can talk!
Very dramatic way of reintroducing him to her life–onstage, where she has to keep it together. Nice snippet!
Thanks for coming by, Linda! Appreciate your words–this 8-sentence snippet thing is harder than I thought. Gotta pick exactly the words that will entice and intrigue… 😉
C. Amrhein (@HistorySleuth1)
I like this! It has that Casablanca, “Here’s lookin’ at you kid,” feel.
Thanks so much, Sleuth! What a cool analogy!
I love the whole musical setting, very different. The excerpt was powerful, her emotions wrenching…terrific snippet!
Thank you for coming by, Veronica! I appreciate the feedback. I’m headed to yours right now!
Hi Nan, I love the setup. The fact that she knows only one person would request that (especially in a bar) is enough to send shivers down my spine.
Thank you, Shannyn! I’ve been reading your snippets for ages–I will get braver and comment, okay? Shivers? Wow–that’s wondrous!
This snippet is wonderful! Nice, deep POV, getting inside her head and bring the reader with you.
I definitely want to read more 🙂
Thank you, Teresa! Gotta tell you–this WWW thing is so much fun! Really enjoying feedback and reading other people’s snippets. I need to start leaving comments though–I’m kinda shy about that. No more! Time to get courageous!
Tense and exciting snippet!
Thanks, Gemma! This book is my heart–glad you’re intrigued!